This week I decided to analyze an email, this email is in regards to to a candidate being chosen for an interview. This first email just really misses the mark. So I have revised it.

“Sorry it took us so long to get back to you. We were flooded with resumes. Anyway, your resume made the final ten, and after meeting three hours yesterday, we’ve decided we’d like to meet you. What is your schedule like for next week? Can you come in for an interview on June 15 at 3:00pm.? Please get back to us by the end of this work week and let us know if you will be able to attend. As you can imagine, this is our busy season.”

Hello Candidate, 

 We are very pleased to inform you that we would like to meet with you for an interview. After careful examination of our many recieved resumes we are convinced that your skill and expertise may be the perfect fit for our company. We would love to set an interview up by the end of the work week, we have an available time of June 15 at 3:00pm. Please get back to us as soon as you can to ensure that this time will work for you or if we will need to make different accomadations. We are very excited to meet with you and hope to here from you soon. 

Sincerely, 

Shelby Schmit

Human Reources department

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